For this
assignment, I asked my parents and roommates for feedback regarding my first
elevator pitch. They all told me that they thought my presentation was done
wonderfully but they also told me that there was a lot of room for improvement.
I learned that I need to slow down when I speak and not use my hands as much as
I normally do because it is distracting. However, my roommates commended me on
my use of eye contact as well as my professionalism when presenting my product.
My parents mentioned that they saw my personality come out in the elevator
pitch which is very important to me. This is because a businesswoman cannot be
one-dimensional and I demonstrated just the opposite of that in my video.
In this
second time around, I decided to maintain the positive aspects of my first
speech in the second elevator pitch. I included the same facts in both and
attempted to use the proper amount of eye contact and professionalism like I
did last time. However, I did my very best to keep my hands down by my sides
for the majority of the video. I also worked hard to slow down my sentences and
truly enunciate my words so that my audience could get a better understanding
of what I was trying to say.
Iara,
ReplyDeleteI agree with your friends and family. I really liked your first elevator pitch. In fact, I wish I could get my down like you have yours.
I think a lot of us have problems speaking way to quickly. I make a concerted effort to always slow down my speech and I have found that it has helped me a lot.
Thanks!
Great pitch Iara. You did a really great job in speaking clearly and slowly enough so it doesn't seem rushed or too slow. Your use of eye contact with the audience really shows your confidence and professionalism. However I think you should incorporate the use of your hands in the pitch. It shows that you are enthusiastic and are in to what you are pitching.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed watching your second pitch for your auto ignition lock venture. It helped me understand better the marketability of your product and learn more in detail. One thing I admired the most of your pitch is readability to the audience. To me it was awkward to stare at your camera and deliver the pitch knowing you are talking to yourself.
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